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 Post subject: The soldier
PostPosted: Sun Oct 04, 2009 11:18 pm 
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An exercise practiced in schools sixty years ago to reinforce the importance of correct writing. See if you can figure out what is going on here.

The soldier entered on his head,
his helmet in his hands,
his sword upon his feet,
his sandles in his eye,
an angry look.

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I'll let others try - this is a goodie :D

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PostPosted: Mon Oct 05, 2009 8:35 am 
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Xerius wrote:
The soldier entered on his head,
his helmet in his hands,
his sword upon his feet,
his sandles in his eye,
an angry look.


Rawr! Punctuation fun:

The soldier entered. On his head, his helmet. In his hands, his sword. Upon his feet, his sandles. In his eye, an angry look. (I guess you could use semi-colons instead of periods, too).

Not a great paragraph that way but at least it makes sense ;)

Here's the classic one I remember: (a joke on a barber shop wall).

What do you think
I shave you for sixpence
and give you a drink

What two ways can you punctuate this so that it means opposite things?

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PostPosted: Mon Oct 05, 2009 8:01 pm 
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Kallysti wrote:
Not a great paragraph that way but at least it makes sense ;)


It was not supposed to be great literature. It was intended to demonstrate to school children how misuse of phrasing can completely hide the intent of the writer.

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PostPosted: Tue Aug 24, 2010 6:57 pm 
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1st punctuation

What? Do you think I shave you for sixpence, and give you a drink ?

2nd punctuation

What do you think? I shave you for sixpence and give you a drink ?

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Hah! This is a pretty cool exercise idea. I may have to file that away in my brain cabinet for future reference. :)

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Close, Lenore! Just put an exclamation point (or a less exiting period) at the end of the last sentence in the 2nd punctualization:

What do you think? I shave you for sixpence and buy you a drink! :)

I guess it'd work with the second question mark, too, but that really makes it depend on the tone of voice that way. If said more sarcastically (like you would with the first one) it'd come across like the first one, too. Does that make sense?

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The importance of punctuation:

Dear John:

I want a man who knows what love is all about. You are generous, kind, thoughtful. People who are not like you admit to being useless and inferior. You have ruined me for other men. I yearn for you. I have no feelings whatsoever when we're apart. I can be forever happy - will you let me be yours?

Gloria



Dear John:

I want a man who knows what love is. All about you are generous, kind, thoughtful people, who are not like you. Admit to being useless and inferior. You have ruined me. For other men, I yearn. For you, I have no feelings whatsoever. When we're apart, I can be forever happy. Will you let me be?

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